Greetings!
I was notified of your existence by your comment on Joverseer916's recent news post. He's a buddy of mine, and we've praised eachother's art for some time, ever since I got on here and discovered the Overseer animations. Anyway:
I enjoyed your short story about the couple in pain. It has both abstract and physical depictions, which are not always easy to put into a coherent text. But you did so quite well.
But what the text need, in my humble opinion, are paragraphs.
My eyes were strained after reading the whoe thing, and when I looked to the side, I had an optical illusion where horizontal grey lines was in my field of view :O
With paragraphs, this is avoided.
Spelling could be better, but I get the feeling that either:
English is not your mother tongue, or you are of younger age, and the texts are rushed, which I suspect the most, since the grammar itself was flawless.
Checked out your sketches as well. Not bad! Some colors would lift them up, and give them more life. Also, you may want to get a hold of a scanner. Scanning the pic/sketches will render them in much higher quality. I'll do so with my old sketches soon, which you can find on my profile.
Until our next encounter!
With the very best of regards,
JamesHatfeld :)
JustAPunnyGuy
You never knew about @Jazza 's art contest before?
NyanaCreation
Nope i never really knew before a couple day's ago. but i wanted to try somthing new ^_^ but now i know