Wow,I couldn't have written something like this when I was your age.Seeing how poetry is a form of art which has different perspectives from which people look at it,I would say the same goes for your piece above.One way is to find out what inspired you to write this-is it for someone or did something happen?However,it's best if you don't answer that as it's like revealing the magic behind finding out messages in the poem,so I'll write my thoughts about it.
Personally,this reminds me of nature that people tend to take for granted.Its similar to being a person who is there but never noticed by others who are being busy with their lives.Like those times when nature interacts with people,we may feel it but never take the time to truly enjoy it but when we do,it hides itself away.I suppose the writer('you') who wanted to befriend the person in the poem is like someone trying to find and embrace nature and in the end,does so.Of course,the feeling one gets when in the presence of nature is indescribable and you wish it was like this forever.
I think that's the best way I could write out my thoughts.You may have had a different idea when you wrote it but it's best that you keep it a secret,after all,poetry is magic.Keep it up,my friend!Beautiful work!
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aahww thank you ^^ i thought it ended up a bit bad but i posted it anyway beccause of the meaning. and yah i like poems because there is my meaning but there are so many meanings that other people can see that i didn't see before what i find beautiful. the story that you give me i think is beautiful. i never thought about it like that and the meaning has his own kinda magic ^^ and you wrote it perfect ^^ thanks for writing a comment i enjoyed reading it alot. and i'll try to make some more poems in the future. but thanks for the compliments <3
@MchectorII @NyanaCreation You have the talent for poetry so don't worry too much about how your poems will turn out.With patience and practice,you'll get better at it and I would love to see more of your work too!
i'm really happy to hear that ^^ thank you.
AdventVoice
What do "I" think it means?
On the surface it seems to tell a story of two who without speaking can relate to one another. (There song is enough). Hidden meanings are hard to decipher and I really don't want to infer anything just witness the two in the woods assured, by soft lights, that there moments of peace will carry them beyond anyone's view. As I listened to your poem, this image came to mind.
https://www.newgrounds.com/art/view/adventvoice/have-you-ever-danced-with-the-devil-in-the-pale-moonlight
I might be off, but I thought it was worth a try.
I am glad you found a friend and that you will never be a lonely soul again.
NyanaCreation
I think that's beautiful how you say it. and the hidden part would be revealed for a bit in the beginning part where i talk about that i want to that but i can't. instead of embressing the soul he went away. mabey you can read it again and think of the oppisent because there is alot of hidden meaning there. thanks for thinking of that picture i think it's beautiful. it is off but it comes close enough. the characters in my story are faceless though.
and the friend i found walked away. (poem explains it a bit more)